The Picture
She dumped her bag on the floor and was shouting out to the maid for a refreshing and rejuvenating lemon juice and it was then that her eyes fell upon it…… But today it was cracked and the once silver shimmering frame that she had always caressed with her loving hand, was now rusty and junked.
She stared it with mesmerizing eyes, a moment before picking it up in her hands. She brought it closer and closer until her eyes could penetrate through the broken glass and peer deep into his soul. She had already cured her broken heart. But when she stared at it a moment longer, she couldn’t help her flowing tears.
The drops trickled down the shattered glass, getting into the picture and dampening it. The face had a blurred huge smile, a loving one…..one who doesn’t only laugh himself but makes the ambience; the air laugh along. He wore the red shirt she had gifted and she could remember how she had affectionately ruffled his hair. He was tall and with an enchanting dark complexion.
But no…..they were the eyes that intrigued and enthralled the one who looked at him. His eyes were so dark, soulful and deep that one could just peer in and the indelible laughing face would be forever adorned on the inkling mind. They had that mesmeric beauty and fascination which always attained a second look. No one could resist him….nor could she…
Stirring out of her dreams as someone called out loud for her, before hastily running off, she kissed the picture with wet lips and uttered…”I love you and miss you Dad!”
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77 comments:
that was so beautiful dear... :)
That's quite a bit of imagery in there...
I miss my father too!!!
He's usually always out for some business stuff or the other. :(
Wah. Thats a wonderful post Meghana. Moving. btw I'm sorry if I haven't commented earlier. I was off blogging for couple of months but I'm back again. Wish you a belated happy b'day.
That sounded very poetic, I don't know if that was what you were going for but it was good.
Awwwwwwwwww
It was so touching!! Gr8 narration Megz...will be callin u tht ok?
Keep goin...u really write well :)
@ Vandita- For the first time...I feel it too :)
@ Taurius- You know he's there for you!! Dunno if she knows :)
@ Ashlin- hey....glad to see you back :0 Will be visiting soon...Thanks a lot!
@ Divi di- No prblem yaar....it sounds cool and besides, that's what some of my friends call me :)
Shhhhoooooo shhhhwwweeeettt of you to appreciate it di!
@ Shawn- Poetic?? hmmmmm.......Actually, for the first time ever....I too didn't know where the story was flowing....it just ended....ended....like that!!
peace...
nice one, sis. beautifully done :)
Awwww....this was beautiful dear !
Loved the way you connedted the frame n the memoirs.
Good going sweety !
@ Vishesh- Peace of course :)
@ Anoop- BB....thanks :) feels good to hear it!
@ Cindy di- Thanks a lot di.....Literally, I too do not know how I did it all...it feels as if I was just in the flow...inspired by you :) Thanks !!
Lovely...amzing...touching...read it atleast 3 times... very nice
@ rajesh- Thanks a lot :)
nice :)
Keshi.
wow....
it was really touching...tu na bahut achhi writer banegi :)
I loved it ...short n sweet
this is a lovely short story... u shud do more of this
@ Keshi di- Thanks :0
@ Sourish bhaiya- Sahi main?? App benayenge?? LOL! Thanks bro :)
@ Zawan- Hey....thanks :0 I'll certainly be doing more of it!!!
As usual you brought out the feeling in portrait, dear. I missed u much these days sis, you touched in the last lines... :)
that was wonderful sis...it was so touching...i miss my father when he goes somewhere...wonderfully written
@ Jeeevan- He...he...yea....personifying un-personified stuff is my niche! LOL!....I'm glad I could do it :)
@ Sahefa- Be sure he misses you too :)
This is probably one of your best posts!
@ Anindita- Wo-ho!!!! Thanks dearie :)
so touching dear, great narration! Such a lovely short story! You are getting even better than before :)
@ Lena- really? Makes my simle larger :D)
Hi Meghna,
Wonderful post! Congratulations!
hey...you seem to be new and are already doin great...way to go!!:)
wishes
Scribblers Inc.
@ Stephi-:D
@ Scribblers- Me and new?? Nope....a year old there :) Yea....new layout and all :D Thanks :P
That was pretty good, my one question though.. for someone that dear, how come the frame is rusted and mirror cracked
Touching.
Hi did u see my new post..
http://tomsdroplets.blogspot.com/2008/08/when-my-shyness-was-at-its-climax.html
@ Anu- Goood question....I wanted to convey that in the swirl of time, she got so engrossed in her work and life and slowly let time heal the wound.....let her favorite frame and pic get lost so she wouldn't go into remembrance or lamenting.....thus the frame became rusted when she had a glance at it by pure chance after much time!
@ Solitaire- :D
@ Tomz- Sorry, I did not get time and also, the net connection here is giving me loads of problems, but now that you tell me, I'll be dropping by soon :)
BTW, nothing about the story??
Yay!!!! That was a great post.
nice...
I thot it cud b ur bf or something. turnd out to be ur father.. !! Nice expression. beautifully written..
I like this much, much more.
Sorry Meghna i too was busy..anyway I read it..Wonderful imagery and similes and heart touching end
regards
Tomz
@ Adi- Hee...he... Thanks :D
@ Nidhdi- LOL! I suppose it seemed so :)
hi meghna!
wow, that was indeed creative story, you really reached your readers.
sweet.
have a nice day!!! ;)
@ Anand- :D
@ Commonsense- Thank gosh!!! You had me worried :)
@ Tomz- I'm glad you read it! Thanks a lot for those kind words!
@ Iriz- connecting to the readers certainly stand atop.....so I;m glad :)
Boy, your only 13 and I just can't wait to see what writing comes out of you as you get older. Keep it up, sweetie, because you definitely got the gift!
@ Don- LOL! Keep waiting with crossed fingers :D
Thanks!
Hey Meghna
Fabulous... I love your writing too and think it has a wonderful author writing it. Excellent job!! :) I hope to keep reading your brilliant stories in the future because my eyes penetrate into them as the girl's eyes penetrate into the picture of her caring father.
The Story touched me and made me feel as if I was there with the small girl, there to help her with her loss and to pat her on the back to support her, I loved the fantastic description you used and I’m sure your skill will grow greater as you grow. Thanks for sharing, really Meghna!! We all loved it and love all of your posts….. ;)
P.S Sorry I haven't commented in a while, I was sick with a high fever and so I couldn't and at school your blog was blocked! :( Sad. Anyway, I am participating in the Mini Olympics, my class representing Jamaica, and cannot wait to compete to win some medals!!!!!!!!
Thanks for that encouraging comment about my brother, he’s much better now.
P.P.S Lovely theme with the flowers looks gorgeous… oh and forgot to say the most important thing I think I’ve already said, though correct me if I’m wrong about the date for it: HAPPY BIRTHDAY MEGGIE!!!!!
Best Love, Nadine
@ Nadine- OMG! Glad to see you in good shape once again! Oh, was it a problem of my blog or the computer? My heartiest wishes of luck to you and I know you;ll do well......Thanks a lot for those kind words....writing is my passion and it encourages me when you appreciate :D
meghna
that was lovely....
MIP
thank you for sharing
desterk@evdeneve-nakliyat-name.tr
Hi..Y don u drop in and read my last write-up? :)
What an absolutely beautiful post. This is the most original blog I've found all week. I'm already subscribed.
@ MIP_ :D Thanks!
@ Izmir- Ummm.....Thanks :)
@ Rajesh- WIll certainly do that....but what have you gotta say about the story ;)
@ Writer Dad- Thanks a lot.....your wonderful comment made my day :D
thank you for sharing
destek@evdeneve-nakliyat.name.tr
@ Meghna
I read it long time back n read it...i did comment...scroll up
P.S: Awaiting ur visit :)
:)
A very "real" description. Almost felt the emotions.
Well written, man.
@ Alok- Thanks a lot....BTW, gal/lady/kiddo.....anything sounds better than man yaar LOL!
thank you fo sharing
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@ Izmir-um....welcome :)
Okay, dude, I will not refer to you as 'man'.
@ Alok- LOL! Khi...khi...khi....dudette then :P
very very good! :)
@ sakhi - thanks :)
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